Moments
Ticking away
The closing seconds
Diminishing quickly
20 seconds
Reflecting on relationships
Love and Happiness
Never knowing the joy
They contain
No tears
Reflecting on losses
Loved ones departed
Never to see them again
In this life
No goodbyes
Reflecting on broken trusts
Loyalties lay to waste
Never knowing the value
True friendship holds
No remorse
10 seconds
Mistakes examined
Lessons locked away
Memories
Sealed forever
Done
The last sunset
Casts a final shadow
Breezes flowing
Above the earth
Sands of time
Emptying
Into the wind
Dissipating
Into an oblivion
All that existed
Never again revisited
Gone
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“All that existed
Never again revisited
Gone”
Sometimes, the only way for us to go forward is for us to remove remnants of the past. Thank the lessons we have learned from it and never dwell on it. Thank you for this one, it inspires me to become a better version of the girl I used to be.
Happy Rally!
Cha
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The poem flows well, fantastic writing!
Thank you…I appreciate the feedback.
every second counts.
Wish it was really so easy to let go of past
Liked the way you added the timer here ! gave a fast pace to the poem.
Intriguing deep thoughts ….Good poem
Painfully poetic. Each word perfectly placed. Bravo!
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whoa. chilling. and a wonderful new year to you!
sounds like a person on deathbed with these images running thru at the final minute.. great images.. mines here- http://fiveloaf.wordpress.com/2010/02/14/hunger/
I can see a grandfather clock with a big pendulum ticking, ticking….great poem!
I panicked as I was reading this because I could actually hear the clock ticking.
My heart is still racing.
Beautiful work!
yep. eternally and irrevocably gone.
which is why some people want time machines.
but i do wish to go back…specially at the days when everything’s just too uncmfortable.
-kyogakura
The time is passing so quickly, we don’t even realize it… Great work!
You’re right, there should be “no tears, no goodbyes, no remorse”. I love this and how it was a poem and a countdown at the same time. While reading it though, I almost wanted to run after “all that existed, never again revisited” but realized they were, indeed, done and gone. This is really, really good!
Wonderful, thought provoking poem..
I love it! short lines that equal deep thought! the oblivian is only the beginning though… thanx for your comment on my poem!
The last sunset cast a final shadow … to maybe free the way to another sunset tomorrow, even more beautiful! Happy 2011, thanks for visiting me!
beautiful! !
very sensible piece. I like the way you used those lovely words.
Well done. A valuable message. Wonderful format. It all works. Thanks, David, for a lovely Rally poem. Hope you are enjoy Rally visits and visitors.
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magical flow.
welcome in,
Enjoyed your participation last time, hope that you have fun!
Thank you and I look forward to the rally.
A very inspiring and bright poem. A delight to read and ponder on.
Thanks so much! I will post it on facebook as well as my blog. I want to be able to read it on a daily basis.
Best wishes. Jurline
So poetic, as well as moving! I love it. May I please repost?
Thank you so much. Yes, please feel free to repost, it is appreciated.
Excellent poem…the format that you elected to use worked perfectly…well said.
Loved this final farewell to the old–it’s very touching–can’t go back.
Here’s to a better new year to come! xoxo
Excellent poem to end 2010. Love this!
I’ve enjoyed my visit my friend and will be back to read more soon!
Meantime, I hope you have a GREAT New Years Eve and that 2011 is a wonderful year for you..
Oh, and I think these words are fantastic….
“The last sunset
Casts a final shadow
Breezes flowing
Above the earth
Sands of time
Emptying
Into the wind
Dissipating
Into an oblivion
All that existed
Never again revisited”